That's an interesting one, Weston--I kept trying to extend this particular poem, but anything I did reduced the impact of that line and even of the original imagery. I ended up staying with just the original four-line form. Respect the muse... ;-)
So glad you enjoyed it, Sydney! As I mentioned to Weston above, I intended to develop the poem further but simply couldn't do and still retain the impact of the original lines, so I kept it trimmed to its original content. Sometimes that really is the best approach, I find... ;-)
Amy, when I'm in that mode of trying to decide what goes and what stays, I am almost always leaning towards leaning, making it leaner and leaner and still keep the message and the magic.
I totally agree. I suppose it might sound strange, given my style, but I'm still a firm believer that often less really is more. "The message and the magic" is a fantastic way to define what has to stay!
"and eternity blinks for a moment."
that's a line to remember.
That's an interesting one, Weston--I kept trying to extend this particular poem, but anything I did reduced the impact of that line and even of the original imagery. I ended up staying with just the original four-line form. Respect the muse... ;-)
"While the curve of time passes over
And eternity blinks for a moment."
Wow.
So glad you enjoyed it, Sydney! As I mentioned to Weston above, I intended to develop the poem further but simply couldn't do and still retain the impact of the original lines, so I kept it trimmed to its original content. Sometimes that really is the best approach, I find... ;-)
Amy, when I'm in that mode of trying to decide what goes and what stays, I am almost always leaning towards leaning, making it leaner and leaner and still keep the message and the magic.
I totally agree. I suppose it might sound strange, given my style, but I'm still a firm believer that often less really is more. "The message and the magic" is a fantastic way to define what has to stay!